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Old 07-26-2007, 04:44 AM
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Kelly Parker has always been, well, a city girl. She was born and raised in The Big Apple. She loved the lights, the music, the drama, and the noise outside was what put her to bed at night. Until one day her apartment is set on fire and her dad has a job promotion, forcing them to move to the suberbs in Georgia. With two annoying twin sisters that LOVE to pull pranks on her (Megan and Ashley), a family who thinks the twins are so sweet and innocent when they're really evil, and the "pops", can Kelly survive the big move? Find out....
....in city girl! Here's a sneak peek (Keep in mind they're still in New York City here. This is the scene where the apartment is set on fire)

A week later was when my miserable life began. On a hot and sunny day, I came home from the movie theater. Everyone was crowded outside of my apartment. I heard fire engines and there was smoke everywhere. Sarah and I dropped our cups and our jaws, and then tried to find our families. They saw us and waved their hands so we could see them. We dashed up to them as fast as we could. Mom and Dad were crying. “What happened?” I yelled over the crowd and sirens. “Apparently, someone left their stove on. It shot up in flames in minuets, and burned down the entire apartment!” Mom responded. “What about Goldie, is she hurt?”
“No, we were walking her while this happened. She started barking and dragged us down here.”
“Where are Ashley and Megan?” I asked.
“Why do you think we’re crying? They’re inside!”
I gasped. “I’m going in.” I said dramatically, and then ran inside the building.. “Ashley...*cough cough* Megan, *cough*, are you in here?” I collapsed to the ground, coughing from the black smoke. Goldie broke free from the leash and ran as fast as she could to the fire fighters. She kept barking, jumping, and running around in circles until the firemen got the message. They nodded at her, and followed her while gripping the hose. I couldn't see anyone because the smoke was too strong, but I heard footsteps, coughing, and barking. After I heard water blasting out of something and the ambulance sirens whistling like there was no tomorrow, there was a blackout.


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Okay, it isn't that great but keep in mind I'm only 11 here! (okay... 11 and 3/4)

Expect to see it posted this fall or winter, I'm practically writing a novel here so I'll just post a chapter at a time to make it easier to read
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Kelly Parker has always been, well, a city girl. She was born and raised in The Big Apple. She loved the lights, the music, the drama, and the noise outside was what put her to bed at night. Until one day her apartment is set on fire and her dad has a job promotion, forcing them to move to the suberbs in Georgia. With two annoying twin sisters that LOVE to pull pranks on her (Megan and Ashley), a family who thinks the twins are so sweet and innocent when they're really evil, and the "pops", can Kelly survive the big move? Find out....
....in city girl! Here's a sneak peek (Keep in mind they're still in New York City here. This is the scene where the apartment is set on fire)

A week later was when my miserable life began. On a hot and sunny day, I came home from the movie theater. Everyone was crowded outside of my apartment. I heard fire engines and there was smoke everywhere. Sarah and I dropped our cups and our jaws, and then tried to find our families. They saw us and waved their hands so we could see them. We dashed up to them as fast as we could. Mom and Dad were crying. “What happened?” I yelled over the crowd and sirens. “Apparently, someone left their stove on. It shot up in flames in minuets, and burned down the entire apartment!” Mom responded. “What about Goldie, is she hurt?”
“No, we were walking her while this happened. She started barking and dragged us down here.”
“Where are Ashley and Megan?” I asked.
“Why do you think we’re crying? They’re inside!”
I gasped. “I’m going in.” I said dramatically, and then ran inside the building.. “Ashley...*cough cough* Megan, *cough*, are you in here?” I collapsed to the ground, coughing from the black smoke. Goldie broke free from the leash and ran as fast as she could to the fire fighters. She kept barking, jumping, and running around in circles until the firemen got the message. They nodded at her, and followed her while gripping the hose. I couldn't see anyone because the smoke was too strong, but I heard footsteps, coughing, and barking. After I heard water blasting out of something and the ambulance sirens whistling like there was no tomorrow, there was a blackout.


- dramatic music -
Okay, it isn't that great but keep in mind I'm only 11 here! (okay... 11 and 3/4)

Expect to see it posted this fall or winter, I'm practically writing a novel here so I'll just post a chapter at a time to make it easier to read
That Is very Good!! Im 11 too Yup Going Into 7th Yea Boi!!!! Yea But Its Very Good!
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I like the part about the twins how they pull pranks on kelly and her parents think they're sweet little angels. Sort of like on drake and josh megan but she doesn't have a twin.
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