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Old 07-19-2007, 08:22 PM
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The town of Mirca isn’t anything special. Except for the many reports of Paranormal activity. Every ghost hunting team in the U.S.A has been to investigate the town, but nothing has been uncovered about it’s past. And those who have been inside the Zindelo Mansion have never come back. Mirca was always peaceful.. Or so they thought.
The mansion has been abandoned for years, only used by the few who dare enter. It has fallen into ruin. The doors creak, windows have been broken by mischievous teens, and the yard is overgrown. Your average haunted house. But, what nobody knows, is why. What is the history behind the house? And why is the family still there?
Meet the Sinclair family. Anne, the youngest, but most troublesome. Edward, the eldest, and the quietest. Nikki, the constant complainer. And Jenny, the widowed mother of the three. The family is as normal as any, until they move into the Zindelo Mansion. Jenny is a nonbeliever, and doesn’t know why everyone stays away from her family. But, Edward has a strong knowledge of the paranormal, and is paranoid about moving in.
This is their story…


Chapter One
The Noises


“Mom!!” Anne screamed, “Edward took Mr. Teddy!!” Jenny glanced over her shoulder, irritated. “Give Anne back the bear Edward,” she growled, loud enough that he could hear. Edward reluctantly handed the toy back to her. She stuck her tongue out at him, and ran deeper into the house. Jenny turned back to unpacking a box, as Edward stalked off.
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No offense but, I don't really understand it. I mean, I get that there in a haunted house and all. Was what was written in Chapter One all of it? Doesn't really make much sense. And what does the title have to do with the book? Sorry I just, don't really make sense of it.
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No, what was written in Chapter One was not all of it. And the title has a lot to do with the book. Don't criticize it before I get further into it..
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I'm not criticizing it. I'm simply saying that to a reader's point of view, it's a bit random in some parts. It's potentially, from what I'm reading, a pretty good story though.
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