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Old 11-25-2007, 02:09 PM
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Luigi's Mansion

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Luigi walked down the dirt path, checking his map carefully. " Left here. Right there." he said to himself. Lightning flashed in the sky. Luigi jumped. " Mamamia!" He cried out into the vast darkness. As he walked, he felt like the trees were watching him, waiting to hit him with their branches. " Ah...There it is!" he shouted. Owls started hooting at the loud shout. He walked up to the door and turned it...


Chapter 1 " Hello? " Luigi called out, looking around to see if anyone was there. Nobody answered. Luigi walked into the mansion. He felt a chill in his body as he looked up. A single key was floating in the air. He clicked on his flashlight and saw a orange blob covering the key. Suddenly. the key dropped. His light had scared the blob away from the key. The key hit the ground with a big PING! Luigi jumped. He walked over to the key and walked up the stairs. He tried a door to his left, but it wouldn't budge. He walked over to a big door and put the key in the lock. He turned it, and it opened with a creak. He stepped inside and began to shudder. The chill was back! This time, the blobs weren't blobs, they were ghosts! "HELP!!" Luigi called out as the ghosts moved in. " Hehe! Not so fast!" someone called out as Luigi heard the door behind him open. Luigi turned his body to face the voice. It was an old man with a vacume cleaner! Luigi couldn't help himself, and started to laugh. A Vacume Cleaner? He thought to himself as he started to stare in amazement. The ghosts were getting taken in like flies! " Wow.." Luigi had started to say, but couldn't get it out.

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Did you right this?????????? Its very good and a great discription of the opening of the game(Wich I have beat ) Cant wait for the next part!
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Old 11-26-2007, 09:01 AM
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thks i beat the game and that inspired me to write the story!
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Cool your a great writer! And do you know what all that extra mansion thing is? Where there are 2 different mansion names but they look the same? What are those?
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Old 11-26-2007, 02:37 PM
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All it is is ( Wow..i've never done that b4!) a harder version of the mansion, u can also get way more money!
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Sorry i haven't been working on the story! I just have so much school work i have to get done
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Might get to it soon
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Omg! This is very good descriptive writing!
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