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Old 11-15-2007, 05:20 PM
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Kingdom Hearts Chronicles: The Beginning

Chapter 1
Destiny Island


Sora and his friends raced across the beach, trying not to get pinched by any of the crabs that had just washed up onto the shore. “Look out!” Kairi cried as a crab jumped up and almost bit Sora on the nose. “Whoa!” Sora yelled as a crab pinched his leg. “Ouch!” Riku shouted as a crab got him in the nose “Run!” they all shouted, laughing. Just as they started laughing, they stopped. A giant crab had washed up onto shore. The three teens took out the keyblades King Mickey had given them for helping save the kingdom. They all lunged at the crab, striking it at the same time. The crab fought back. It tried to pinch Kairi, but Sora lunged at it and cut off its pincher. “Nice one Sora!” Riku shouted to him, just as he got hit by one of the crab’s massive legs. “Riku! Are you ok?” Sora asked his friend. “Yeah!” he shouted back to Sora. The crab was not giving up! It swung its other pincher at the teens. It hit them all, sending them flying backwards. “Ouch!” Kairi yelled. Her arm had a big gash in it. “Kairi, get to safety!” Sora and Riku yelled at the same time. The two boys lunged at the crab, sending both of their keyblades deep into the body of the crab. The crab fell over, and went back into the water from which it came. “Man! That was tiring.” Sora said to Riku after a couple minutes of silence. “Hey Sora, lets go check on Kairi and see if she’s ok.” Riku said to Sora, and they both raced down the beach looking for Kairi.





When they finally found her, she had a cast on her arm. “What happened Kairi?” Sora asked when he saw the cast. “The crab broke my arm.” She said. “What do you want to do now?” Riku asked his two friends. “I say that we have another adventure except, this time we don’t delay our trip.” Kairi said almost immediately. “Works for me.” The two boys said in agreement.” O.K. We need to start gathering supplies for our trip. Sora, you need to get food for the trip. Riku, you will get the sleeping bags, pillows and other items we need for the night. I will gather the wood and supplies we need.” Kairi said. The two boys nodded and ran off.



The three friends were hopping into their newly designed boat, getting ready to set sail when the storm came. “Run!” Sora shouted at lightning started flashing in the sky. The waves were getting very strong now. One wave sent the three friends under the water for almost a minute. Sora was the first to get back to the surface. He took a deep breath and went back under to save his friends. Suddenly, he grabbed a hold on Kairi’s hand and started to swim upwards. His hand slipped and Kairi began to fall back down towards the bottom of the sea, but Sora was not going to let one of his friends drown. He went up for a quick breath then he shot back down into the water. As he went down, he wondered where Riku was. He got to Kairi and grabbed her hand tight. He swam back towards the surface, making sure that he didn’t let go. When Sora finally reached the surface he almost passed out from holding his breath. Sora ran back on to the shore, gasping for breath. “Is...Everyone...Ok?” Sora asked, taking his time catching his breath. “Yeah.” Kairi and Riku said together. The three friends remade the boat so that it would be safe during a storm and then set off again.


Hollow Bastion


Heartless were pouring all over Hollow Bastion. Cloud was doing everything he could to fend them off. Seperoth was now on Cloud’s side. The two of them were fighting off millions of Heartless. “ Take this! And that!” Cloud shouted at the Heartless as he took them down. Hollow Bastion was going to be over taken soon! Donald and Goofy were also at Hollow Bastion, fending off Heartless in the alleyways. Cloud looked into his communicator and tried to get to Sora. When he finally got connection with Sora, Heartless were swarming him. He had to contact Sora! “ Sora, this is Cloud. Can you hear me?” “ Yes loud and clear.” Sora replied. “ Listen, I need you to get to Hollow Bastion as soon as you can!” “ Why?” “ Heartless are invading!” Cloud yelled as he struck a Heartless, sending it flying backwards. “ I’ll try.” Sora said and Cloud lost connection.



Destiny Island

“ Riku, Kairi. You guys up for a little side trip?” Sora asked his friends in the boat. “ Why?” Riku asked. “ Hollow Bastion is being invaded.” Sora told his friends. “ It’s fine with me.” Kairi said. “ I think I can still teleport us there using my magic.” Riku said to his friends. Riku seemed to be lost in thought. He was thinking of Hollow Bastion. Suddenly, the boat disappeared and traveled towards Hollow Bastion.

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Chapter 1
Destiny Island


Sora and his friends raced across the beach, trying not to get pinched by any of the crabs that had just washed up onto the shore. “Look out!” Kairi cried as a crab jumped up and almost bit Sora on the nose. “Whoa!” Sora yelled as a crab pinched his leg. “Ouch!” Riku shouted as a crab got him in the nose “Run!” they all shouted, laughing. Just as they started laughing, they stopped. A giant crab had washed up onto shore. The three teens took out the keyblades King Mickey had given them for helping save the kingdom. They all lunged at the crab, striking it at the same time. The crab fought back. It tried to pinch Kairi, but Sora lunged at it and cut off its pincher. “Nice one Sora!” Riku shouted to him, just as he got hit by one of the crab’s massive legs. “Riku! Are you ok?” Sora asked his friend. “Yeah!” he shouted back to Sora. The crab was not giving up! It swung its other pincher at the teens. It hit them all, sending them flying backwards. “Ouch!” Kairi yelled. Her arm had a big gash in it. “Kairi, get to safety!” Sora and Riku yelled at the same time. The two boys lunged at the crab, sending both of their keyblades deep into the body of the crab. The crab fell over, and went back into the water from which it came. “Man! That was tiring.” Sora said to Riku after a couple minutes of silence. “Hey Sora, lets go check on Kairi and see if she’s ok.” Riku said to Sora, and they both raced down the beach looking for Kairi.





When they finally found her, she had a cast on her arm. “What happened Kairi?” Sora asked when he saw the cast. “The crab broke my arm.” She said. “What do you want to do now?” Riku asked his two friends. “I say that we have another adventure except, this time we don’t delay our trip.” Kairi said almost immediately. “Works for me.” The two boys said in agreement.” O.K. We need to start gathering supplies for our trip. Sora, you need to get food for the trip. Riku, you will get the sleeping bags, pillows and other items we need for the night. I will gather the wood and supplies we need.” Kairi said. The two boys nodded and ran off.



The three friends were hopping into their newly designed boat, getting ready to set sail when the storm came. “Run!” Sora shouted at lightning started flashing in the sky. The waves were getting very strong now. One wave sent the three friends under the water for almost a minute. Sora was the first to get back to the surface. He took a deep breath and went back under to save his friends. Suddenly, he grabbed a hold on Kairi’s hand and started to swim upwards. His hand slipped and Kairi began to fall back down towards the bottom of the sea, but Sora was not going to let one of his friends drown. He went up for a quick breath then he shot back down into the water. As he went down, he wondered where Riku was. He got to Kairi and grabbed her hand tight. He swam back towards the surface, making sure that he didn’t let go. When Sora finally reached the surface he almost passed out from holding his breath. Sora ran back on to the shore, gasping for breath. “Is...Everyone...Ok?” Sora asked, taking his time catching his breath. “Yeah.” Kairi and Riku said together. The three friends remade the boat so that it would be safe during a storm and then set off again.


Hollow Bastion


Heartless were pouring all over Hollow Bastion. Cloud was doing everything he could to fend them off. Seperoth was now on Cloud’s side. The two of them were fighting off millions of Heartless. “ Take this! And that!” Cloud shouted at the Heartless as he took them down. Hollow Bastion was going to be over taken soon! Donald and Goofy were also at Hollow Bastion, fending off Heartless in the alleyways. Cloud looked into his communicator and tried to get to Sora. When he finally got connection with Sora, Heartless were swarming him. He had to contact Sora! “ Sora, this is Cloud. Can you hear me?” “ Yes loud and clear.” Sora replied. “ Listen, I need you to get to Hollow Bastion as soon as you can!” “ Why?” “ Heartless are invading!” Cloud yelled as he struck a Heartless, sending it flying backwards. “ I’ll try.” Sora said and Cloud lost connection.



Destiny Island

“ Riku, Kairi. You guys up for a little side trip?” Sora asked his friends in the boat. “ Why?” Riku asked. “ Hollow Bastion is being invaded.” Sora told his friends. “ It’s fine with me.” Kairi said. “ I think I can still teleport us there using my magic.” Riku said to his friends. Riku seemed to be lost in thought. He was thinking of Hollow Bastion. Suddenly, the boat disappeared and traveled towards Hollow Bastion.

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Hollow Bastion

Cloud took down a few more Heartless as he saw a boat appear over a group of invading Heartless. Sora had arrived! Sora and Riku drew their keyblades, rushing over to assist Cloud with the Heartless.
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Old 06-06-2008, 11:24 AM
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Old 06-06-2008, 07:22 PM
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Hmm...It's generally not a good idea to write too much about fighting scenes, but I guess that's alright. Work on making proper paragraphs and putting more details in. You could have had at least five pages worth of writing from that! Also, the part about Kairi's cast is unrealistic. She'd have to go to the doctor to get a cast.

Otherwise, it's fine. The concept of this fanfiction has potential~
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Good job! Yeah, I agree about he part about Kairi's cast. Can't wait for more!
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i never said where they found her, but they did find her there.
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