Hmm...It's generally not a good idea to write too much about fighting scenes, but I guess that's alright. Work on making proper paragraphs and putting more details in. You could have had at least five pages worth of writing from that! Also, the part about Kairi's cast is unrealistic. She'd have to go to the doctor to get a cast.

Otherwise, it's fine. The concept of this fanfiction has potential~

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